Careless.
A sudden bloom
of crimson tide
in every
of crimson tide
in every
heartbreak
that
I hide.
yet
Your
Impassive
icy eyes
won't
ever say
I'll stay.
icy eyes
won't
ever say
I'll stay.
____________
Your
impervious
opaque eyes
careless
of every
heartbreak
sown.
opaque eyes
careless
of every
heartbreak
sown.
Yet
the seared
heart sighs
don't go
just
love me
lie to me
once more.
posted by Pincushion @ 3:30 PM
9 comments
9 Comments:
You have selectively chosen few words, but chosen them well. I see the eyes as icicles, as sharp as knives to cut hearts, and as deep as oceans in which to drown.
If you had fallen for those eyes, i hope that you can find eyes that bathe your artistic beauty in a warm gazing embrace.
Brrrrrrrr...i'm still shivering from this one.
I like the way you end each of the parts with "I'll stay" and "once more".
It almost seems to me like one line, with all the 'between the lines' brought out in this poem. Not sure if that was the intention, but that is how I saw it.
Pin's..this made my heart ache..i dont know why!!you wrote-"the seared heart sighs don't go justlove me
lie to me
once more."
struck a chord..:)
keep posting..i am reading:)
Wow, very nice again! :)
And for that you get that gmail account, and that too free... Ya am all heart now! :)
You need to give me a mail id though to send you the invite...
LOVED IT.
brought bak memory :)
This is breathtakingly beautiful, Pincushion! It's uncluttered, undiluted poetry! I LOVE IT!!!
loved it.keep writing....
A dark chocolate of a poem. Liked the flow, like a red dress moving in the dark to a dance.
- La Luna
Poeticmermaid - Its always about the eyes, isn't it ??!! Thank you for expressing such a lovely hope for me..i hope so too...thank you.
Agastya - Hey, I never noticed that ! As always you bring a fresh perspective :)
Jo - I am glad you could relate ! Thanks !
Esclava - Thank you for your offer ! I did visit your gallery and some of the work is truly amazing. Thank you !
Primal soup - Thank you ! Indeed , I DO agree that your heart is very big :)! I'll definitely give you my email-id soon !
Elixir - Thank you, glad u could relate :)
Speckled band - Thank you for your generously kind words :)
Ubermensch, Sudarshan -Thank you :)
Luna - What a lovely metaphor ! Thank you so much :)
Mysti - Welcome to my blog and thank you for taking the time to appreciate and post a comment ! I look forward to a lot more visits. Thank you :)
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