You never have...
This is the time when random words and random worlds take hold of me.
This is the feeling so amorphous that it seeps through me.
This is the choked pain that has your name written on it.
This is the feather breath that has suffocated, for you have forgotten it.
This is the time when I acknowledge you have forgotten me.
This is when time whispers that you don't love me.
And you never have.
posted by Pincushion @ 5:16 PM
23 comments
23 Comments:
feel a bit choked.
rather beautifully written. glad it wasn't longer.
You never have sounded so lovely! I love how you used the word "amorphous" and the line: "the feather breath that has suffocated..." Amazing!
Suffocating at the thought of being forgotten. Thoughts can choke us.
Pins, breathe. Though others may forget you, never forget yourself.
(Easier said than done:(
Inkblot-Oh, I'm sorry I made you feel unhappy my dear..next time i shall make you smile :)
Stan-I am so glad you think so! Thank you :)
Mermaid-Oh, yes they can..its a constant battle, sigh..but I shall remember your wise words, thank you my dear!
Lee-Welcome to my virtual home! So glad you visited and for your thoughts! I shall look forward to seeing you here often! :)
This is beautiful, reminiscent of the heartbreak almost everyone has felt at some point in each life. I will definitely come back and read more of your work!
well, the 'he' or 'she' in this lovely piece may not but we all do!
Windblownbutterfly-Welcome aboard! Ahhh yes..pain and heartbreak are unfortunately a part of everybody's life..the trick is to be able to move on!
Glad you liked my work..thank you for helping me discover you!
:)
CJ-Thats such a sweet thing to say but then you ARE a sweety! :))
Very Powerful!
superb
captures all that emotion so well
Great stuff!
And glad to have you on my blog!
The words have been flowing on my other blog! http://firmlyrooted.blogspot.com
Pin, this is very evocative and moving!! Thoroughly enjoyed reading it!!
Gloria-Welcome!I am glad you liked it! Hope to see you often! :)
Natalia-Honoured that you think so! Hope you shall be back! :)
Floots-Thank you dear!
Gautami-Thank you and I shall certainly visit your other blog! :)
Pat-*bows* Thank you! :)
Touched me a lot..when we feel ignored or not loved we tend to lose ourselves in that feeling.Sometimes we accept it and move on slowly..
Ultimately it is all within us,to know that life is there for us at all times..
Keep the windows to the outside world open always dearest.
hugs for you
Pins we could never forget you
This reminds me of a senryu I once wrote...
For her I compose
short poems of endless true love
Slap! She loves me not.
Note the ending "satori" is similar to your final statement, "And you never have."
I feel your expressed your feeling a awareness through this pain quite well.
Nicely done. Come by for a visit sometime.
-Concetta
Wow you wrote it so beautiful. ;) But i always loved you. What are you talking about :P
love always..
You know who. :P
Jo-What a wise and lovely thing to say! thank you..what would i do without friends like you?!! Hugss :)
Sue-That means so much to me! Thank you.
Travis-Welcome aboard! What a lovely senryu (i have to admit i know very little of those!)thank you for posting it here, I can certainly see the similarity! I shall look forward to reading more of your work, thank you for dropping by. :)
Concetta-Thank you..I shall certainly visit :)
Anon-Do I really know who? !!
I always try to remember that it takes a great moment of joy to give birth to deep sorrow.
Hi there!
Brittle thoughts brought to a boiling point. The char of your pain is evident in every word.
Rare that terse lines would express more pain than verse...good stuff
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