Friday, October 28, 2005

By my side (55 word poem)

You with me,

A child
picking up pebbles,

hunting four leaf clovers,
running along primrose paths,
licking lemons sitting on doorsteps,

You with me,


A youth
in a restaurant full of people,

gazing into my eyes as I gazed back
at life aromatic with pain and strife,

Loneliness so faithful,

You’re always by my side......


(The 55-word poem idea is English-August's
the link to which is posted in the title)

13 Comments:

At 10:03 AM, Blogger {illyria} said...

i love your use of everyday scenery here, pincushion! makes the poem pretty and grounded.

 
At 2:24 PM, Blogger . : A : . said...

Lovely imagery and moments in this one. Have added it to the list.

Do you want to add the tag - 55 word poem

 
At 9:19 PM, Blogger Russell CJ Duffy said...

I feel like a snooker ball that is boucing around and off the 55 cushion of blogging fashion.

clever stuff Pins.

 
At 7:17 AM, Blogger arvindiyer said...

And wat do u know...this Girl can WRITE TOO:)

 
At 12:04 PM, Blogger Paperslut said...

Nice.

Reminds me of Marcy Playground's first album. Do listen if you can get your hands on it.

 
At 4:31 PM, Blogger mermaid said...

You know what I love about this 55 word poem? Though you meet the 55 word criterion, you shape the verses with your own form.

 
At 4:47 PM, Blogger Pincushion said...

Trans-Thanks! but could have been better for sure!

Agastya-Thanks! Yep, did add the tag :)

CJ-Clever? donno really! but had go anyways, lol!

Arvind-I am glad to find out you think so ;)!!

Mermaid-Ahh, I tried! But i'm afraid am not too happy with it! Thanks for the words of encouragement!

Ramchi-You are always so generous with your kind words! Thank you :)

 
At 4:48 PM, Blogger Pincushion said...

Wonderwall-I sure will make it a point! Thanks :)

 
At 6:47 AM, Blogger Jyotsna said...

This is simple yet so beautiful!

 
At 11:00 PM, Blogger Lorena said...

i like the observations here. very warm and tender and honest.

very sweet poem.

 
At 7:58 PM, Blogger camera shy said...

55 words

this is cool

i will give it whirl mysef soon . . .

 
At 11:44 PM, Blogger Russell Ragsdale said...

Poingnat twist, beautifly done Pins! I liked his a lot, the theme is fantastic too!

 
At 8:30 PM, Blogger iamnasra said...

uThis week Living In Poetry is having a tribute for .:A:. (English-August Blogspot) please visit the blog down below to tell us your thoughts on his writing and poetry


L I P
www.livinginpoetry.blogspot.com

Spread the word

 

Post a Comment

<< Home

MyShoutbox.com - Free Shoutbox! Who Links Here
Blogroll Me! Blog Search Engine

< ? Blogging Mommies # >

« ? Verbosity # »

< ? Blogging Mommies # >

Listed on Blogwise